Eleven Plus English - Essay Writing
Practical Suggestions from a Veteran
The following article is written by an Eleven Plus veteran, Kushal I. Kotecha, who successfully gained several offers from all the senior independent schools he applied for as well as a grammar school for entry September 2005. He elected to take up the offer at Queen Elizabeth's School for Boys in Barnet, Hertfordshire.
Introduction
Most senior independent schools require candidate pupils to write an essay as part of their selective entrance exams. Typically the school permits 20 – 30 minutes for the essay, offering up a selection of up to four essay titles. One of these titles is often requires the child to continue the story within the comprehension they may have just completed in a previous section, or complete an essay for which the first few lines/paragraph is given or sometimes to write about a personality.
This is actually an amazingly short time to plan and write an essay from scratch, especially one that contains a proper introduction, body and conclusion. If you don’t believe it try one yourself, bearing in mind this essay is written typically by a ten year old at the end of a day in which the prospective pupil has sat Verbal Reasoning, Mathematics, and English comprehension examinations in an intimidating alien hall full of hundreds of other prospective pupils all competing for a limited number of places. One eleven plus veteran described her state as ‘practically brain dead’ by the time it came to writing her essay. However she was grateful her mother had instilled the ‘3Ps’ in her, ‘Preparation, Practice and a Prayer’!
Preparation Overview
A good starting point is to source examples of good short stories written by their peer group, or last year’s successful eleven plus veterans, especially those essays that they wrote in their own preparation. The benefits of this are instant. For instance your child can tangibly identify the three sections of a good essay (‘Introduction, Body, Conclusion’ or ‘Beginning, Middle, End’ respectively) written in a language and a vocabulary they can relate easily to, as well as get the main point of being able to write something interesting yet succinct enough to conclude within the allotted time.
Ask your child to critique these example essays, spot grammatical errors, suggest better vocabulary, spot rambling sentences (like many in this piece of work) and suggest alternative endings. Once you have critiqued a few essays jointly with your child, he or she will be thinking along the right lines, and their mind will be more fertile and focused.
Practice Overview
Begin by exploring permutations of typical titles with your child, initially verbally, trying out a host of endings, introducing additional characters both male and female, changing locations, different times of the day etc. Make sure most of the creative thinking is sourced from the child, by seeking inquisitive opinions. Accolades, encouragement and enthusiasm are the order of the day, since confidence should outweigh doubt in the child’s mind. Making this into a game will make revision more fun, involve other siblings if possible.
The next stage is to start planning essays. There is no ‘industry standard’ for this. Some children will write notes under headers of ‘Introduction, Middle and Conclusion’, others will use memory maps or bubble diagrams. Experiment with your child to see what works best for them. In an examination if your child fails to complete the essay, the examiner may make reference to the plan to see how your child had planned to conclude it, otherwise it is largely ignored.
Writing Overview
The actual practice of essay writing is a slow iterative process. Remember, in the short allotted time, your child has to, at the very least:
- Make a plan
- Complete the essay
- Keep the handwriting legible
- Demonstrate an extensive vocabulary
- Demonstrate a mastery of grammar and punctuation
- Strike a balance between the three sections of the essay
- Trying not to make too much happen whilst keeping the story interesting and flowing
All this is not something that is instantly achievable by the best of ten year old candidates. So practice is essential.
Typical Essay Titles
- Write a story with
Alone
as the title, where you suddenly realise that you are on your own. It may be true or entirely made up, but it should include your thoughts and feelings as well as what happened. (Question from Merchant Taylor School , Northwood, London ) - Write a story (true or made up) about a visit you make to some relations of your own. (Question from Merchant Taylor School , Northwood, London )
- Write a letter to a cousin inviting him to stay with you. You should try and interest him in some of the varied and unusual activities he can take part in. (Question from Merchant Taylor School , Northwood, London )
- Describe a situation which you have experienced which might also be called
A Magical Moment
, showing what your thoughts and feelings are. (Question from Merchant Taylor School , Northwood, London ) - Write a clear description of an animal you know well. Make sure you describe what it does and how it behaves as well as what it looks like. (Question from Merchant Taylor School , Northwood, London )
I prefer Winter to Spring
( Dulwich College , London )The door and what was behind it
( Dulwich College , London )The prince of Darkness is a Gentleman
( Dulwich College , London )Ash on an old man's sleeve
( Dulwich College , London )My hobby
( Emanuel College , London )- Write a story that begins with the words,
I had been waiting for such a long time for this to happen
( Emanuel College , London ) - Write a description of someone you admire. (You may choose someone you actually know, or someone you have never met. Describe them and explain why you admire them.) ( Emmanuel College , London )
The above is just a very small cross-section of typical compositions. You can make up your own during practice. If you are aware of other example or actual essay titles please write in to11plus-essays@ElevenPlusExams.co.uk.
Sample Essays
The following sample essays were written by children preparing for their 11-plus selective examinations for entry into senior independent school. Whilst they have been typed out, the original spelling errors, grammatical errors etc have been left in deliberately. You can use these to critique with your child.
Original Essays:
Corrected Essays
The same essays marked by a Kent based teacher who is also a specialist 11+ tutor:
Marked 11 Plus Sample Essay: Tsunami
Marked 11 Plus Sample Essay: Alone
Marked 11 Plus Sample Essay: Ace
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