Descriptive writing
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Descriptive writing
Hello all,
When my DD write she spent most of her writing on describing the place, person etc, but not getting into the story if you know what l mean . Any advise or help please.
Thanks
When my DD write she spent most of her writing on describing the place, person etc, but not getting into the story if you know what l mean . Any advise or help please.
Thanks
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Never was partic strong on english but wonder if it would goo to break this down into bits ie 1) describe the person / place etc 2) what happens to them / what they find out etc 3) the conclusion..
getting part 2 done might be a case of GIVING her the person and place and say "what happens next" .... then part 3 may be giving her the story so far and getting her to carry it on...??
Help - we need a teacher here....
getting part 2 done might be a case of GIVING her the person and place and say "what happens next" .... then part 3 may be giving her the story so far and getting her to carry it on...??
Help - we need a teacher here....
Try to make her set the scene and tell the story stimultaneously. By this I mean launch into the story and describe as you go.
e.g. Blood was seeping through Becky's blue tracksuit bottoms as she limped along the rocky path. Her normally immaculate hair hung in red rat tails round her pale, thin face, and she was shivering in a white teeshirt, plastered to her skin, as the driving rain slashed across the moor. Eleven-year-old Elle couldn't bear to even look at her, knowing it was all her fault that her best friend was injured....
You have started the story, given some description, set the scene (raining moor) and introduced two characters.
Try practising this with her. Avoid having too many characters. Keep the basic story simple but effective.
e.g. Blood was seeping through Becky's blue tracksuit bottoms as she limped along the rocky path. Her normally immaculate hair hung in red rat tails round her pale, thin face, and she was shivering in a white teeshirt, plastered to her skin, as the driving rain slashed across the moor. Eleven-year-old Elle couldn't bear to even look at her, knowing it was all her fault that her best friend was injured....
You have started the story, given some description, set the scene (raining moor) and introduced two characters.
Try practising this with her. Avoid having too many characters. Keep the basic story simple but effective.