SB3, this post is to give you a big thanks ! Your advice on returning to basics was spot on.
I made DD do a piece of writing and observed that she gets stuck into very imaginative ideas and absence of planning lacks the required grounding. She tried to use all devices/wow words... in all sentences so obviously runs out of stamina by the end of first paragraph. She probably took the teachers advice of using catchy phrases, adjectives… etc too far. We did some strategy change and came up with the following for a descriptive writing task -
1) She will first work out a structure e.g.. 5 boxes for 5 senses.
2) She will then put min 1 idea, max 3 ideas in each sense drawers (as she calls it).
3) That way she will do min 1 sentence, max 3 sentences each thus totalling to 5 - 15 sentences.
4) She will do a variety of sentences, ideally one simple, one complex and one medium.
She found the idea of all icing and no sponge very amusing and quickly understood where she was going wrong. Told her a story that gave examples of various writings and the instance reaction was one can't have just imaginary piece or just obvious there needs to be a balance and purpose.
In the next piece I will ask her to work on fiction and make sure see sticks to the structure and the five Ws.
I will now see the teacher's comments.
Once again, thank you for your advice. I think, you will make a great teacher with your sense of humour, experience and talent. You may want to consider 11+ tutoring
ps. Apologies for the delay as I am battling another potential disruption coming our way.